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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.
#electricity #power #station
The given flow chart
illustrate
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method
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a method
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 of
produce
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producing
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th
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the
 electricity by using a hydroelectric energy system.
Overall
, the production of electricity
involve
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a
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apply
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four main stages,
cyclical
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a cyclical
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 process that begins
wih
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with
 the flowing river
water
since
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from
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 the
high
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high-level
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level
reservoir
 and
eventually
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this
 process
produce
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produces
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 the power.
According to
this
 diagram,
firstly
, the river
water
 flows to the
high
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high-level
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level
reservoir
 surrounded by a dam and faces a mechanism which is opened during the daytime and closed at night.In the
ssubsequent
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subsequent
 stage,
for
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to
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generate
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generating
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 electricity,
water
 goes
downward
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down
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 through the large size drains and they enter the power station which
consist
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 of several parts including a generator, power lines and reversible turbines. In the next stage, during the day fluid passes through
this
 system and ultimately appears in the
low-
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low-level
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level
reservoir
 by using reversible turbines, which operate the generator.
However
, at night time
this
 mechanism works in the opposite direction.In fact, the
water
 is pumped into the
high
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level
reservoir
 from the lower one.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, level, reservoir with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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