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Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be eco_tourists', travelling in responsible, environmentally friendly ways. as a result, the eco_tourism industry is expending. To what extent do you think it is a positive trend?

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Nowadays,
eco-tourism
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 is growing rapidly and many
people
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 tend to travel in
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 way.
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 some
people
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 believe that
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trend
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 is not a good thing, I totally think it is a positive development. The first reason why the growth of the
eco-tourism
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industry
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 is a positive
trend
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 is that more population of a society can travel. There are always
people
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 who barely take a trip because of their poor financial status. Through these economical travelling ways ,
people
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 who are interested can have more of
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 experiences.
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, the
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industry
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 will lead to the development of many rural areas.
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,the majority of eco-tourist travels are held in the
countrysides
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 which
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 quiet and flourishing.
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, different jobs would be made for locals to satisfy travellers' needs. Some argue that the expansion of the
eco-tourism
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industry
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 is a negative
trend
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. They refer that the rapid increase in the population of travellers who set up camps in nature will damage animals' Inhabitat as many
people
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 or travelling agencies are careless about protecting nature.
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, I believe those who choose to spend time in
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 environmentally are aware of their value and the importance of their protection. In conclusion, I believe the growing
trend
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 of the
eco-tourism
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industry
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 is a good development as more numbers of
people
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 can travel and
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 because it boosts rural areas' economy by making jobs.

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