Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace (e.g. at home, when travelling, etc.). Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, emerging technologies make it possible for people to do their
work
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anywhere,
such
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as at
home
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, when
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, or for business purposes. I think
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when compared with working from
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office
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the office
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, there are more benefits, like maintaining
employees
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moods and emotions, than drawbacks,
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as being able to communicate with other coworkers and reducing misunderstandings, to working outside the workplace. On the one hand, working in flexible places could increase the employee's mental health. Workers should not use mobility to go forth and back from their
office
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and
home
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, which can affect their emotions and make them feel tired when they arrive at their
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or
home
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due to
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the traffic jams. Working at
home
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with their smart devices could be a solution to
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issue and help to maintain their mood and emotions.
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, working in the capital city, where many people are busiest and there are always traffic jams during
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hours, makes people stressed, and working at
home
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could be a solution to
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problem.
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, when the job requires more teamwork and collaboration, it is important to
work
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at the
office
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. It is because it makes it easy to communicate with other coworkers and reduces misperceptions and misunderstandings.
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, marketing positions need more collaboration and communication with other coworkers in their teams. So, it would be better if the marketing team worked in the
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to easily communicate and collaborate with others.
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, if there is a problem or target to achieve, it can be easy to catch up, meet, and discuss it immediately. I personally value maintaining mental health
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other factors when choosing a place to
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.
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, I believe that working anywhere is a much better place to
work
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, especially for workers who
work
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and live in the capital city because of the traffic jams and busiest city. I
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believe that most citizens nowadays prefer to do their
work
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outside their workplace
due to
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flexibility and comfort.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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