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Prison is the best way to punish criminals. Agree or disagree

#prison #criminals
It is popularly believed that being imprisoned is one of the best options to punish
criminals
.
However
, I totally believe
that is
 not
only
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 way to tackle the problem. In current times ,
commiting
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committing
 a
crime
 is significantly increasing. As an example, nowadays many
people
 who can not make a living are turning into offenders .
Furthermore
, there are some reasons
such
 as poverty and unemployment which can cause offences.
As a result
,
people
 prefer easy money
instead
 of
make
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 money by working hard.
That is
 why most individuals claim that jail will be
good
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a good
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 punishment.
On the other hand
 , imprisoning
criminals
 can not be a solution. Nowadays, most
criminals
 re-offend after they have been punished. Prisoners can not earn money ,
this
 is
because
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 lack of employment and education. If prisoners are educated and prepared how to
be become
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become
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 one part of
the
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society,
crime
 would be reduced. I think some
criminals
 who commit minor offences should be forgiven.
However
, when it comes to rapists and serial killers , they must be punished by going to jail.
This
 is because killing
people
 may motivate
people
for
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crime
 .
As a result
, it causes
growth
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the growth
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 of
crime
. All in all , I do believe that they should not be rubbing shoulders with murderers. So , taking all reasons into consideration can solve problems.
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