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Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

#technology #people #viewpoints
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In the past, to know or meet each other,
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 needed to be face-to-face and make interactions. Nowadays, many
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 do
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 online without direct contact, and some situations could divide
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 into groups or even ban them.
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behavior
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 with
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 and provide my opinion that there are more benefits than drawbacks depending on their utility. Currently, most
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 use social media and some apps in diary lives. Routines that needed to interact in person in the past, and opinions that were given in the restricted group, now the way of doing
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 was changed.
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, if a person provides an opinion about a controversial subject, they could have undue stress
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people
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 not respecting different sides of view.
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,
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 could have mental diseases
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 social media exposition, and to avoid
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, some prefer to have a solitary life with some close friends.
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,
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 are prone to be divided into groups of interest, and depending on
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 could be beneficial or hazardous. Some
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 use current
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 to maintain contact with distant relatives, to keep up with other cherished
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 through social media, and do volunteer work to help others.
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, a family that needed to move on to another country could depict their life, their challenges and help others in the same situation.
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, depending on their objectives,
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 could benefit and bring
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 together. In summary,
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behaviors
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. I believe that the objective and the way of using modern technologies is paramount to result in joint or separation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • communicate
  • social media
  • virtual meetings
  • global community
  • isolation
  • distract
  • face-to-face interaction
  • personal connections
  • dependency
  • technology addiction
  • digital divide
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