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With the coming of digital education, some people believe that traditional studies may fall down. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Modern technology has become prevalent in the past decade. It is believed that
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online
education
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traditional teaching methods will not be considered in the future of
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views In
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recent years , most
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schools have been preferring modern technology rather than the normal classroom method .
Firstly
,
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due to
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students
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due to
 the internet ,
students
 learn are getting more interested
due to
 the visuals and try to understand them easily .
Secondly
,
students
 get more skill-based knowledge which will be helpful
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 some believe that
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modern
education
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traditional
education
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teachers . chiefly,
students
 learn discipline from attending the
schools
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.
Furthermore
 ,
this
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endeavors
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.
For example
,in
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students
 are given tasks to clean the
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everyday
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,
this
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person
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people
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society. to
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recapitulate
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in spite
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modern
education
,
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traditional
education
 will not fade away
due to
 its importance
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