People in many countries are spending less time with their family. What are the reasons, and effects of this?
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problem is the nature of the work. They have to work busily all day so they have very little Linking Words
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, nowadays in Vietnam people usually spend an average of 8 to 12 hours a day working. When they are occupied with their job, they will Linking Words
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, school learners in Asian countries usually spend 10 hours a day and 6 days a week at school, Linking Words
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less interested and paid attention by their parents. In fact, the lack of affection from parents will make children’s psyches hurt, leading to moodiness and disappointment. Even if it lasts too long, it will cause depression in children. Linking Words
Secondly
, closing the generation gap between parents and children will become more difficult without family bonding share. So family relationships will be affected and may lead to conflict and unhappiness.
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