You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter describe the problem with the equipment explain how this problem is affecting your work say what you want the shop or company to do

Dear Mr Abdullah I'm Ravshanova Mushtariy.I am writing in order to complain about a piece of equipment that I purchased from your shop,which I was using for my
work
at home. The equipment that I purchased is an electric saw.
Unfortunately
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I have noticed a significant problem with it.The device is failing to power on and
also
some of the teeth are broken.I noticed it before even using it.
Firstly
I plugged it
,it
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was working without any flaw,
however
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after exactly 1
hour
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it didn't
switched
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on. These issues are impacting my ability to carry on my
work
.As I rely on
this
equipment daily to use,it's causing a lot of problems and
also
taking
my
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lot of time
however
my
work
has to be done urgently,
therefore
we will celebrate a big event in our home,so
this
work
has to be done as soon as possible. Given the situation,I request that you arrange for a repair or provide a replacement as soon as possible.I would appreciate it if
this
situation could be resolved within the next 2 days.It would be great if it would be resolved earlier than 2 days. Please let me know if you have any questions to ask and contact me if anything is needed.I look forward to your response. Thanks for your attention. Yours sincerely, Ravshanova Mushtariy
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coherence cohesion
In future, make sure to include more transitional phrases to ensure a smoother flow of ideas between paragraphs.
task achievement
While the overall tone is appropriate, using more formal language can enhance the formal nature of the correspondence.
coherence cohesion
Your letter is well-organized, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
You provided a detailed explanation of the problem with the equipment, how it affects your work, and a clear request for resolution.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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