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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

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Marriage is still considered a big achievement for some people in several countries, and the main objective is to have
children
 as their offspring. The
decision
 to have a
baby
 in later life has become a trend in the
last
 few years around the world. In
this
 essay, I will outline the benefits and the disadvantages of
this
 issue from various points of view. The main reason some married couples taking the
decision
 to postpone having a
baby
 is that they want to focus on their job to get a better position in their careers, so having a
baby
 at an early
age
 is
time
-consuming because they have to spend more
time
 nurturing them after working hours which can be used to enhance personal development,
such
 as taking courses or attending training provided by their employers.
Besides
, they want to attain a more stable financial condition before having a
baby
 amid the escalation of tuition fees and living costs, so they save more money to ensure that their
children
 will have good education and healthcare in the future.
However
,
this
decision
also
 gives detrimental effects for
parents
,
children
 and society as well. Having
children
 at a later
age
 in some cases causes miscarriage and even the death of mothers or babies.
Moreover
, it
also
 leads to a significant gap in
age
 between two generations, and as the
parents
 get older it will reduce the
time
 between them to spend leisure
time
 together and
children
 will not obtain adequate affection and consideration from their
parents
 and
this
 phenomenon will affect
children
' ability to communicate and interact in society. In conclusion, I contend that
decision
 to have a
children
 at later
age
 will give more drawbacks than its benefits because of the risk when a mother gives birth and the impact on
children
 when they grow up
due to
 the lack of quality
time
 with their
parents
.
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