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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

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Marriage is still considered a big achievement for some people in several countries, and the main objective is to have
children
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 as their offspring. The
decision
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 to have a
baby
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 in later life has become a trend in the
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 few years around the world. In
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 essay, I will outline the benefits and the disadvantages of
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 issue from various points of view. The main reason some married couples taking the
decision
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 to postpone having a
baby
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 is that they want to focus on their job to get a better position in their careers, so having a
baby
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 at an early
age
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 is
time
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-consuming because they have to spend more
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 nurturing them after working hours which can be used to enhance personal development,
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 as taking courses or attending training provided by their employers.
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, they want to attain a more stable financial condition before having a
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 amid the escalation of tuition fees and living costs, so they save more money to ensure that their
children
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 will have good education and healthcare in the future.
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,
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decision
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also
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 gives detrimental effects for
parents
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,
children
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 and society as well. Having
children
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 at a later
age
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 in some cases causes miscarriage and even the death of mothers or babies.
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, it
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 leads to a significant gap in
age
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 between two generations, and as the
parents
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 get older it will reduce the
time
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 between them to spend leisure
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 together and
children
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 will not obtain adequate affection and consideration from their
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 and
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 phenomenon will affect
children
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' ability to communicate and interact in society. In conclusion, I contend that
decision
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 to have a
children
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 at later
age
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 will give more drawbacks than its benefits because of the risk when a mother gives birth and the impact on
children
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 when they grow up
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 the lack of quality
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 with their
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.
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