People should be allowed to continue to work as long as the want to, and not be forced to retire at a particular age such as 60 or 65. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experiences.

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In many countries, people are forced to retire after their 60s by the government. Some human beings think that they should be permitted to stay working whenever they want to stop. I totally disagree with

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opinion, because they will be tired both physically and mentally, when they are older.

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, young generations should have the opportunity to have an occupation.

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, older people are getting exhausted more easily than younger ones

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their biological conditions.

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, senior citizens have less energy than younger citizens .

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, even if the older workers have more experience, they are slower to do their tasks.

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tiredness is not only physical but

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mental. Even if elders feel they have some energy to continue working, most of them have some memory problems

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of their brain functions decreasing.

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, lots of diseases causing memory loss,

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as Alzheimer's, occur in later ages.

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, if people stay working after their 60s, the young generation can not have a chance to be employed because the working population is saturated.

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, it can cause junior men and women to have depression.

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, if humans can not have a job after graduation, they have to live with their parents because they can not afford the rent of a new flat.

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, they will be depressed and they will not be able to find their own way because they don't have any independence. In conclusion, I think individuals should be forced to retire after a certain age because they can't work properly when they don't have enough biological conditions

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the ageing process.

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, new generations should be given a chance to become independent individuals.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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