the graph below shows deforestation rates in the brazilian amazonfrom 2008 to 2021 and the pie chart shows deforestion issues in the Amazon for same years.

the graph below shows deforestation rates in the brazilian amazonfrom 2008 to 2021 and the pie chart shows deforestion issues in the Amazon for same years.
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The line graph compares the amount of land cleared
due to
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deforestation on the Brazilian Amazon side in almost one and a half decades starting from 2008,
whereas
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the pie chart illustrates the crucial factors behind
this
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damage.
Overall
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,
while
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the territory had lost its highest amount of vegetation in 2008, the main culprit was small-scale agriculture to make the area null.
To begin
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with, in 2008, the trees from more than 37000 square kilometres areas were cut down, but after ,that the rate slowed noticeably in the next two consecutive years. The rate again soared in 2013 though plummeted dramatically to almost half of 2008's quantity
at the end
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of 2016. After that, the size of the volume fluctuated and
finally
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settled at 2 thousand square kilometres, which is the lowest in fourteen years time period.
On the other hand
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, the highest volume of vegetation disappeared
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smallholder agriculture which took 35% of the barren earth. The second most issue is the grazing place for the cattle though it cleared 10% less land compared to the first one.
Furthermore
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, the two next reasons were large-scale agriculture and logging which were counted for 20% and 15% of deforestation.
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, there were a few other insignificant factors too.
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