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The chart below compares the number of people per household in the UK in 1981 and 2001

The chart below compares the number of people per household in the UK in 1981 and 2001
#people #household #uk
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The diagram gives information about how many
people
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 lived in one home in the
UK
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 in
two
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 separate years in 1981 and 2001.
Overall
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, the number of
people
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 per household of
two
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people
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 was the most common live in the
UK
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. Over the 20-year period, there were considerable increases in a-person and
two
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-
people
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 groups,
while
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 the family groups of more than three
people
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 declined. Looking first at 1981, the percentage of the
two
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people
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families
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 commanded the biggest share of the
UK
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's
families
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, at 31%, followed by
families
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 with three
people
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 and four
people
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, with the corresponding figures being 20% and 18%. The next most popular household was single living, with 17%,
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 the bigger
families
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such
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 as five
people
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 and six
people
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 were far less likely to live, ranging from 6-8%, with the biggest group being the least. After twenty years, the number of
families
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 with
two
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people
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 rose by 3% compared to 1981 and
this
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 remained the largest share in the
UK
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. The percentage of a person increased the most considerably in the
UK
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, by 26% in almost
two
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 decades,
while
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 that of three-
people
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 and four-
people
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 groups had seen a downward trend of 3%.
Finally
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, the rate of five
people
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 group
families
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 was 2% smaller and that of six
people
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 group was less popular, with a figure of 2%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, uk, two, families with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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