The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The line graph illustrates, information about how many new outlets have been opened and the existing shops have been closed in a country from the year 2011 to 2018.

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, there were so many fluctuations happening in all the years. The number of shop shutdowns has increased by the end of 2018. With regard to opening,It started with 8500 in 2017,

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the closure have been only 6200 at that time. But it overlapped openings by the term 2012 because new launches had a sharp plunge in that year. Even Though the figure was fluctuating for the following period in 2013 and 2014 ,by the end both types has reached a similar count of 100.

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the graph in 2015, closed stores has a drastic decline where going below 1000.,Meanwhile the new store become stable for the next 3 years. Closing of the outlet has slowly increased to 5000 and became stable by 2018 in spite of many drops.

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period the new venture's rate has slightly decreased by 3000.

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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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