Fewer and fewer young people are choosing to become teachers. Why do young people not want to be teachers? How could this be changed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

This
is an era driven by science and technology. The younger
generation
is fully equipped with all sources of knowledge and options to choose
fields
for their career. Irrespective of place or country, the internet opened doors of opportunities in all
fields
. These are the underpinning reasons for many youngsters to opt for tech and science-focused jobs
thus
reducing their inclination towards becoming educators or teachers rapidly. In my opinion, Teaching is been seen as a less adventurous job profile as compared to other
fields
.
This
may be
due to
the repetitive nature of the job and
also
the in-house / office-type work routine. On another hand high-tech and science-oriented jobs are more
delivery
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focused with exposure to the outside world is been seen as more lucrative to the younger
generation
. One of my siblings who is inherited from a teacher's family, opted to go for Medical Sciences after high school. Despite all avenues being open in universities with his parent's reputation, he zeroed down to become a doctor. Of
course
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the aspiration matters against the perks and benefits the
profession
brings to you. ,
,
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However
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her decision shocked our family. I am sure
this
is a common trend everyone around us sees in their families and social circle happening. Now to change
this
trend or socio-mentality, I would rather opt for a change in the point of view itself. Teaching is been seen as a non-challenging, not-so-profitable
profession
. I would try to roll
this
over as teachers of a new era not just in science, mathematics and engineering but
also
in the Arts and commerce
fields
. These teachers will become the brain of the new
generation
who will be front-ending all new ventures
along with
the students in live situations that could be advanced laboratories, in science experiments. We should enable sponsors to come forward to build
this
infrastructure for our schools and universities. As a parent,
its
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our duty to set the focus of our kids to look at
this
from a wider and "enabler" angle. In summary, every
profession
has its pros and cons. I believe Teaching is a
profession
where you deliver knowledge and skills to the mass, to build a well-educated and well-mannered society of tomorrow.
Such
a noble
profession
should be honoured and well developed
according to
the needs
to
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changing times, and that's how our younger
generation
will start adopting
this
as their career of choice.
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