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Everybody should be allowed admission to university or college programs regardless of their level of academic ability. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the modern period, where
education
 plays a vital
role
 in the development and improvement of society. People argue that everybody should be allowed admission to university study programs regardless of their level of academic ability. I agree with
this
 and have explained my opinion in the following essay. I believe that every individual has some area of interest and hidden talent which would lead the path to a successful career. To start with, there are many reasons which point out that the opinion is correct. First of all, in many countries, a student with higher scores got dropped out as they wanted to pursue their passion.
For instance
, we all know that Steve Jobs 'The Apple CEO was a high school dropout.
Thus
, based on the marks always don’t determine the suitability of any particular course. Another world famous person, Elon Musk once said that marks don't decide the talent of an individual.
Therefore
, I believe the government should give more importance to identifying people's individual
skills
instead
 of academic-based
education
.
On the other hand
, the
role
 of government must not only end by identifying the
skills
 of an individual rather it must take the responsibility to nurture those
skills
 by providing the required training. So that the individual can enhance the skill later in the work life and achieve success.
This
 would play an important
role
 in the growth of the country that directly and indirectly depends upon the
skills
 or talents of people.
Lastly
, in conclusion, I would like to add that a country’s future depends on the young generation.
Education
 does play a major
role
 in the development of the country
as well as
 an individual’s life.
Education
 up to a certain level is necessary. But university
education
 should be less restrictive as a student can be talented and still couldn’t get admission
due to
 his poor grades in the least interesting subjects.
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