There have been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter -Describe the complaints that have been made -Say why the reception area is important -Suggest how the reception area could be improved
Dear Mr. Trump,
I hope
this
email finds you in radiant health and you are doing well. I am writing this
letter to give you some ideas about the problems we are having in the reception
area
.
I would like to depict some issues we have been facing in the reception
area
for a long time. Firstly
, the seating arrangement looks messy including an obsolete sofa-set for visitors. Secondly
, the overall
lighting system seems dimmed in the reception
area
. Finally
, there is a lack of gardening in front of the reception
area
.
Since several prominent customers visit the factory for business purposes, the reception
area
is more important to create an impression among the visitors and guests. In other words
, the reception
area
in a company is used as a mirror of the factory environment and culture.
Moreover
, I would like to give some ideas to improve the overall
environment in the reception
area
. On the one hand, we may take the initiative to keep the reception
area
more spacious including the arrangement of a state-of-the-art sofa-set for the visitor. On the other hand
, we may renovate the gardening area
including some seasonal flowers.
I hope you will like the aforementioned suggestions, and I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours faithfully,
Joe BaidenSubmitted by faisalmahamood on
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph contains a single clear idea to enhance readability and organization. The ideas presented in the letter are quite distinct, but be careful to keep them well-separated.
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Maintain a formal tone throughout your letter for consistency as informal greetings can seem out of place in a business letter.
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Always expand on your reasons and explanations to fully develop your response to the task, giving examples when possible.
coherence cohesion
Improving the use of cohesive devices and transitions can help the flow of your argument and provide better clarity.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite