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Human activity has had a negative effect on plants and animals all over the world. Some people think that it is too late to do something about it. Others think that there is still time to take effective action. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Nowadays, it is becoming common for
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 to have
activities
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 that negatively affect
plants
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 and
animals
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 worldwide. Some
people
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 believe that
people
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 can not do anything about the impacts,
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 others argue that society can do something for helping
animals
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 and
plants
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.
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, I side with those who believe that
people
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 can take part to improve the
environment
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, especially
animals
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 and
plants
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. On the one hand, human
activities
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 bring bad impacts on
plants
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 and
animals
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. In
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 modern era, many products that
people
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 use contain harmful chemicals
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 as pesticides. By using too much pesticide,
animals
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 can be poisoned. The residue of pesticides damages the balance of nature. For illustration, flowers can die because of consuming the residue.
Consequently
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, the number of
plants
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 and
animals
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 dramatically decreases. The huge damage continues year by year.
On the other hand
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,
people
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 still have time to take action on helping the balance of nature. There are some
activities
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 that
people
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 can do
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 as avoiding harmful chemicals and using
biopesticides
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.
Biopesticides
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 are made of various natural compounds. By using
biopesticides
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, the
environment
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 can be saved. It will not poison the
animals
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 and
plants
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 because the ingredients are non-toxic.
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, the use of
biopesticides
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 is really helpful for farmers to maintain their farms in the right way.
As a result
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, the natural balance is well-maintained.
To sum up
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, presently, some human
activities
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 can bring bad effects on the
environment
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, especially
animals
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 and
plants
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. Society usually uses too many pesticides that damage nature and
animals
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 drastically and
people
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 can not do anything about that.
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, many
people
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 believe it is not too late to help the
environment
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 by using safe chemicals
such
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 as
biopesticides
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.

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