Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people.
It is generally believed by society that
money
give
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gives
people
various opportunities, one of which is helping those in need. I completely agree that wealthy people
can provide financial support to people
who are facing with
certain monetary problems.
Change preposition
apply
To begin
with, people
with high income
can help children and adults with serious health issues through charity organizations. There are thousands of Fix the agreement mistake
incomes
people
in the world with severe diseases, which require incredibly expensive medical equipment. Furthermore
, few people
can afford buying
medicine themselves Change the verb form
to buy
therefore
prosperous
group of Add an article
a prosperous
population
can donate their Add an article
the population
money
to charity
which Fix the agreement mistake
charities
track
Change the verb form
tracks
people
in need and resend required sums of money
to the hospitals. For instance
, as far as I know, Angelina Jolie is famous for sending a great portion of her earnings to the
charity organizations thereby saving lives.
Correct article usage
apply
In addition
, due to
mortal diseases or accidents many children lose their parents everyday
being left without a trustee. Replace the word
every day
As a result
, these youngsters find themselves in orphanages. From my point of view, they need financial support to get appropriate education to be able to find a job in the future and to enter adulthood without much difficulties
. Fix the agreement mistake
difficulty
For example
, rich people
can create grands
for children of Correct your spelling
grand
the
Correct article usage
apply
school age
who have lost parents or the only breadwinner of the family to motivate them Add a hyphen
school-age
study
hard.
Add the particle
to study
To sum up
, money
is a key factor of
providing assistance to Change preposition
in
people
who have encountered problems and cannot tackle them on their own.Submitted by spiritedaway_3 on
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