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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, it is argued whether
history
 is worth learning or not. Some
people
 claim, that the past cannot help us to solve modern problems,
while
 others disagree. From my point of view,
history
 is an essential source of information, which can allow
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 to find the same patterns in the past and to predict the future. On the one hand, some
people
 believe, that everything happening in the
world
 is cycled.
This
 means, that we face the same problems as our ancestors did and the future generation will definitely come across similar issues.
As a result
, looking for answers in the past has no sense.
Furthermore
, if
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 want drastic transformations in the
world
 for the better, they should not account for the past experience.
On the other hand
, others urge, that the knowledge of
history
 is essential to understand the modern
world
 as we see it today. They assert that it can help
people
 to mitigate the consequences of various dramatic events similar to what happened in the past and
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create more modernized decisions. Personally, I maintain
this
 point of view, as I am convinced, that the knowledge of
world
history
 allows us to understand the causes of the main global problems
such
 as global warming or the lack of pure water.
For instance
,
due to
 the past epidemic governments did not doubt how to act in the Coronavirus period.
To sum up
, awareness of the historical background of the
world
 provokes disputes in the community with some
people
 thinking there is no necessity to learn
history
 and others with the opposite opinion. Personally, I agree, that the past lets us come to more conscious decisions relying on past experience.
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