Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

Some individuals believe that
zoos
are all cruel and should be closed down. Others, but, feel that
zoos
can be helpful in
conservation
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the conservation
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wild
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of wild
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animals
. In my opinion,
zoos
play a significant role in
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the convervation
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convervation
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conservation
of wildlife
as well as
serve medical
researches
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. On the one hand, some believe that
zoos
is
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are
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unethical and should
closed
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close
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down. They think is keep
animals
in cages
restrict
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restricts
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their freedom.
This
is because
animals
feel
same
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the same
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as
humans
.
For example
,
the
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scientists showed
the
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that
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animals
can develop
derpression
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depression
,
anxiety
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and anxiety
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result of
keep
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keeping
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it in
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an artifical
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artifical
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artificial
environment rather than their normal life in wildlife.
Furthermore
, some
zoos
use
animals
for entertainment in order to make profits without
look
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looking
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after them.
On the other hand
, I would like to agree with those people who believe that
zoos
is
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are
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extermely
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extremely
important for
protection
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the protection
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of
animals
as well as
improve
humans
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life .
Firstly
, thanks to
zoos
, we can protect endangered species from extinction.
This
is
due to
the fact that
,
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zoos
have better
environment
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environments
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against hunting and shortage of food and water.
Moreover
,
zoos
have professional staff namely, doctors,
nurses
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and nurses
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who can provide healthy food and better care for
ainimals
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animals
.
Secondly
,
zoos
can contribute to medical
researches
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research
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. To
illustrates
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illustrate
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,
zoos
can make
esay
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way
for researchers to do their
researches
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research
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in order to trial
a
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apply
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new drugs to make sure the drugs
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are
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safe for
humans
.
Conseqently
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Consequently
,
zoos
can assist to
ehnace
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enhance
overall
health of
humans
.
To sum up
, in my perspective,
zoos
play a key role in
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the convervation
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convervation
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conservation
of wildlife
as well as
boosts
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boost
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the
overall
health of
humans
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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