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Band 4

Some claim that studying abroad has great benefits for a student’s home country. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Write 250 words.)

In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 I
also
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 accept that studying abroad has better benefits in many ways, but it
also
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 depends on what
country
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 you go to. I think that if you go
studying
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to study
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 abroad in America, Canada, New Zealand and China or in a big
country
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 that
have
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has
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reputation
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a reputation
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about
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for
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 education will
make
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bring
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 more benefits than your
home
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country
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, or go
study
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 in
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country
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a country
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 that
have
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has
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reputation
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a reputation
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 in anything that
you
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interests you
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 interest with will
make
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bring
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 more
profits
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benefits
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 than your
home
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country
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country,
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that
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which
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 may
be
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apply
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not have
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reputation
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a reputation
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 about. Another thing that I would agree to by studying abroad is languages, maybe not every
country
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 uses another language
but
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, but
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 it still
has
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apply
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a
country
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 that
didn’t
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doesn’t
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 use the same language as us.
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Also
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Also,
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 if we are studying abroad in a
country
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 that has a good
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reputation
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reputation,
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 I think that working in the future will
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 have more chances to go through. By the way, learning in your
home
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country
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 doesn't mean it’s worse than studying abroad. Studying abroad may look like you have gained more experience
but
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, but
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 it
also
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 depends on the university or school that you choose. In your
home
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country
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country,
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 if you choose to
study
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 in a good
reputation
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 university or in a university that
have
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has
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specialised
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a specialised
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reputation
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 that you
wanted
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want
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 to learn,
also
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 give you a chance in equal
on
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for
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 people
that
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who
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study
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 abroad.
Anyways
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Anyway
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in
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, in
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 my
opinion
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opinion,
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 I still agree
to
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with
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 students that
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study
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Studying
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 abroad may
has
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have
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great
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greater
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 benefits than
home
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country
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 students, because I think that it’ll give us more experience and
more
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a more
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mindset
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open-minded mindset
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 about people to understand
about
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apply
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.

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task response
Start with a clear view. State if you agree or not in one line. Then give two or three real reasons with a small example for each.
coherence
Make your writing easy to read. Use one idea per paragraph. Use simple words and linking words to move from one idea to the next.
content
You show you know some good points about why study abroad may help the home country.
structure
You try to explain your view with thoughts about language and future work.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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