Some claim that studying abroad has great benefits for a student’s home country. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Write 250 words.)

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The education program of study in another country. They can offer a lot of benefits that you have never had before in your hometown. They would claim a new experience and a new community.
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program is very expensive in some situations.
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, if we want to know about the advantages or drawbacks of staying in aboard. It depends on our opinion. The advantages of studying in another country. It will give you a better education
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than the countryside. In many
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countries
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country
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country,
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they will
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their
culture
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own culture
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and local languages. You can adapt yourself
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a different culture.
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Moreover
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if you try to learn
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new language, you will have a native community that would be a good connection.
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they can give a lot
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. On the other side. Disadvantages of studying abroad. Many students abroad get homesick because they can’t adapt to their personal life in different environments.
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, the cost of studying abroad is high. Some parents can not afford a lot of money. Except you have a scholarship from the government but if your score is not good enough. You can not get
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bursary. And some scholarships had many conditions. You have to read it in detail and carefully. In my opinion, studying abroad is a morally correct choice. Because it gives you a new way of you that you can learn with it.
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, you can have a new friendship that would make you learn more from them.
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, you can learn a language from
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speaker.
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your language will be developed. I think
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experience will change your life that you never imagined.

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Consider improving the clarity of your argument by ensuring each paragraph clearly supports your thesis statement. Each main point should be developed with more detail and clearer examples.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use proper grammar and vocabulary consistently. For instance, phrases like 'you will have a native community' might be more naturally expressed as 'you will have access to a native community.'
task achievement
You presented a clear opinion about studying abroad and included relevant points regarding both advantages and disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
The essay structure generally follows the introduction, body, and conclusion format, which is important for coherence.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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