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Some people believe that social networking sites have had a huge negative impact on individuals and society. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the present world, the number of
people
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 who are using social media is constantly increasing. I believe it has some positive effects on individuals and negative ones on
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 which will be discussed in
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 essay. In regard to individuals, these
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such
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 as Facebook or Instagram enable
people
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 to be in touch regardless of where they are living. Since these
sites
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 are free,
people
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 just need to create an account and add their friends and family members. After having a page on Facebook or Instagram, they easily can communicate with their friends who are living in another country, sending them some documents or pictures. Before these
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,
people
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 had to pay lots of money for an international call.
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, these
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 have brought
people
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 closer together and
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 them be in touch whenever they like.
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, there are some groups on the
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 where
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 with common needs can join and share their ideas and support each other. Moving to
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, I believe that social networking
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 have negative effects on
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. First of all, more
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 do not meet each other in person which was common before, gathering at least once a week or month in community clubs, so fewer and fewer
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 have face-to-face interactions. It brings down the solidarity of community and
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 over time, and
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 in one community gradually become strangers to each other.
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, the safety of
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 might be threatened, and the rate of terrible crimes can go up.
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, some offenders or criminals could easily register on these
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, hiding their true identities, and building relationships with innocent young individuals in order to deceive them.
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,
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 would be in danger from using these
sites
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. In conclusion, though networking
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 have made long-distance communication much easier, they decrease the sense of empathy in
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. I recommend it is better to limit the usage of these
sites
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social isolation
  • virtual interactions
  • mental health
  • feelings of inadequacy
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • misinformation
  • destabilize
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • productivity
  • foster connections
  • educational content
  • social activism
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