The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.
The pie graph and the table show information about
tourists
visiting Australia.
Overall
, the highest rate of
tourists
is for Asia, followed by Europe,
whereas
the third place is for Americans and the least percentage belongs to other countries. Regarding the length of stay, European
tourists
stay the longest period
as well as
Americans.
Besides
this
, Europeans and
tourists
from other regions choose camping or caravan for accommodation, doing similar activities around the coast.
On the other hand
, Asiatic people and Americans spend their time sightseeing and they like to stay in hotels. To start with, the highest rate of
tourists
is from Asia representing 37% of the total. Most of them like to spend one week in Australia doing some sightseeing and staying in a 5-star hotel. In the second position, there are the Europeans, which represent 35% of the total. They spend the longest time in the country with an average of 16 days, staying in a camping or caravan
while
they do some swimming and sunbathing. In third place, there is one of the smallest percentages as 18% of the
tourists
come from the United States. They stay an average of 14 days in a 4-star hotel, doing some sightseeing.
Finally
, the smallest percentage of visitors belongs to people who come from different parts of the world which represent 10% of the total. These people prefer to stay around 10 days in Australia, living in camping or caravans
while
they do surfing as their main activity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tourist influx
  • Peak season
  • Demographic information
  • Fluctuations
  • Duration of stay
  • Preferred accommodations
  • Analyze
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Compare and contrast
  • Speculate
  • Marketing campaigns
  • Management
  • Data
  • Notable
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