The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.
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The pie graph and the table show information about
tourists
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visiting Australia.
Overall
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, the highest rate of
tourists
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is for Asia, followed by Europe,
whereas
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the third place is for Americans and the least percentage belongs to other countries. Regarding the length of stay, European
tourists
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stay the longest period
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Americans.
Besides
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this
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, Europeans and
tourists
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from other regions choose camping or caravan for accommodation, doing similar activities around the coast.
On the other hand
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, Asiatic people and Americans spend their time sightseeing and they like to stay in hotels. To start with, the highest rate of
tourists
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is from Asia representing 37% of the total. Most of them like to spend one week in Australia doing some sightseeing and staying in a 5-star hotel. In the second position, there are the Europeans, which represent 35% of the total. They spend the longest time in the country with an average of 16 days, staying in a camping or caravan
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they do some swimming and sunbathing. In third place, there is one of the smallest percentages as 18% of the
tourists
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come from the United States. They stay an average of 14 days in a 4-star hotel, doing some sightseeing.
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, the smallest percentage of visitors belongs to people who come from different parts of the world which represent 10% of the total. These people prefer to stay around 10 days in Australia, living in camping or caravans
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they do surfing as their main activity.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tourist influx
  • Peak season
  • Demographic information
  • Fluctuations
  • Duration of stay
  • Preferred accommodations
  • Analyze
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Compare and contrast
  • Speculate
  • Marketing campaigns
  • Management
  • Data
  • Notable
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