The chart below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The chart below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The chart
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the ownership of electrical
appliances
and
amount
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the amount
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of time spent doing housework changes in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
, the
percentage
of households with electrical
appliances
are washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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. It is noticeable that
at
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1920 the
percentage
have been lower and
then
gradually it has been increased rapidly over by
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time.
Most
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visible
is
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vacuum
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the vacuum
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cleaner and refrigerator as it is on the highest. The consumption of housework
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per week has
been
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rapidly decreased ,
as a result
of
introduction
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of electrical
appliances
. The number of
hours
of housework has been at 50
hours
per week in 1920 , it has been gradually decreased
at
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nearly 35
hours
in 1940 and In 1960 it has fallen to 20
hours
and
then
steadily it has been travelling till 2019. The
percentage
of households with electrical
appliances
at the beginning of 1920,
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% for
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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, 30% for vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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, and 40% for washing
machine
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machines
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. All of these three has been fluctuated in 1960 and it has been steadily growing.
However
, the
percentage
of washing
machine
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machines
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is at least use approximately
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75% in 2019 ,
whereas
other
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two
appliances
at the highest reach
by
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100% in 2019.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words appliances, percentage, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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