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some countries encourage foreign companies to open in their country. many people think that government should focus on encouraging local businesses rather than foreign businesses. To what extent do you agree?

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Few individuals encourage foreign firms to open in their
country
,
while
 other people believe that governments should focus on encouraging only local businesses rather than focusing on foreign businesses. I partially agree with
this
 sentence, both have their benefits.
This
 essay will discuss both views giving some reasons.
To begin
 with, having the encouragement of foreign
companies
 benefits us in myriad ways. First of all, the most noteworthy positive point is that improved the economy of either
country
 or its residents.
For instance
, many firms are opened, more jobs will exist for everyone, which will let each one has their income.
Furthermore
, It
also
 helps to improve the knowledge of people, which is new.
In Addition
, Foreign
companies
 will bring new technology and knowledge. If we will focusing only on local
companies
then
 our
country
's economic growth will stable and never reach the top level. On the other side, only focusing on local businesses
also
 has a few benefits,
such
 as government taxes, the more products and services are sold,
due to
 foreign
companies
, it will be more money charged by the government.
Furthermore
, people can protect their culture and distinction from other countries.
Thus
 local culture and traditions can become an excellent source of revenue.
To conclude
, both ideas have their own advantaged, I argue that encouraging foreign countries has more beneficial rather than local business for own
country
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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