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Government should spend money on railways rather than road. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#government #money #railways #road
I strongly agree with the statement that
government
 should spend money on
railways
 rather than
road
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roads
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. The main
benefits
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benefit
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 of spending more on
railways
 is it can help
to
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poor
people
 more. My opinion is
discribe
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describe
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the
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future, in blow paragraphs.
Firstly
, as a
government
 spend more and more on
a
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apply
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railways
 poor
people
 will get
high
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a high
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 advantage. If poor
a
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people
 will get more benefits
than
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then
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 poorly will be reduced. If
a
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government
 will give
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discount to a
student
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students
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then
a
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not only
car
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cars
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,
bike
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bikes
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 and more will be reduced but
also
 less
noice
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noise
 pollution, air pollution and more
also
 less. Future more
,
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 will be
also
 eco-friendly.
For example
, If a
government
 will start rail for a
student
then
 it will be easy
as well as
 fast.
Secondly
, every person can
affort
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afford
 rail
price
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prices
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 because.
Train
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 is cheap
then
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than
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 other transportation.
For example
, if a nation will offer
to
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rail facilities
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for student
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student
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students
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then
 it will be good for a
student
as well as
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a citizen
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citizen
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citizens
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. Roads growth is more expensive than
a
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railways
a railway
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railways
. As country should invest more
on
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a
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apply
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railways
 as it is good for
a
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students. Young
people
 should focus on
railways
 growth.
In addition
, airways are
also
 good
opions
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option
 but its expensive and all can not
affort
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afford
 it. In conclusion, in my
opinion
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 train have much more benefits
then
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than
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 waterways, airways and more.
According
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toAccording
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, to me trains is fast
then
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than
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 car and bike.
A
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government
as well as
public
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the public
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both
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apply
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should focus on
a
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apply
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railways
 growth. From the above ,information it can be said
thata
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that
that a
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railway
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railways
 is better
options
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.
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