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some people believe that a great difference in age between people and children is more benefitial. do you think the advanteages of a great differnece in age between them outweight the disadvantages?

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Age
 differences between people in a family have been common in today's time.
Hence
, the gap between people and the heir is generally seen nowadays more than in the past. I believe there are many advantages and disadvantages to
this
.
This
 essay will elucidate with appropriate examples.
To begin
 with, the World has been intensely competitive and people often opt to chase their intended dream career first
then
 settle down and get married.
Due to
 the World being immensely demanding, generations in today's
life
 pursue higher and higher studies and get married later than their usual
age
 of 24 or 25 years. After getting married, when their heir is of five years of
age
 or the
age
 where they can comprehend worldly matters, the
life
 gap is huge. There are many merits of having a huge maturity difference in understanding offspring.
For example
, when families are successful, they can spend enough time with their children.
As a result
 of it, children when they grow up can look up to their parent's successlife and learn many things from them to achieve their goals in the field they are interested.
Furthermore
, their parents play a vital role in helping their heirs gain their desired goals.
To conclude
, I believe the
life
 difference is not that paramount of importance between two generations as long as the gap turns out to be a boon. becoming their inspiration, motivation and guidance. Apart from all the aforementioned matters, youth differences have been common in today's time for the world demands skills one requires to lead a
life
 one intends to be successful.
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