The diagrams show Queen Mary Hospital at the three different stages in its development: 1960, 1980 and 2000.

The diagrams show Queen Mary Hospital at the three different stages in its development: 1960, 1980 and 2000.
The diagrams show Queen Mary Hospital at the three different stages in its development: 1960, 1980, and 2000. The provided diagrams illustrate how Queen Mary Hospital developed in 1960, 1980, and 2000. As can be seen from the three maps, the hospital had been developed on the south of the Main Road and had been bigger over time. In 1960, the hospital was in the north of the
area
, and a shopping
centre
was in the west of the hospital.
Besides
, there was a
car
park
in the south of the hospital, and farmland was in the west of the
car
park
and in the south of the shopping
centre
. By 1980, the shopping
centre
had been demolished.
Moreover
, in the same
area
, a cancer
centre
had been built, and the hospital had been expanded as a pharmacy.
In addition
, the farmland had been developed, and a nursing school had been constructed. By 2000, the nursing school had been relocated to the part of the west
area
of the
car
park
, so the
car
park
had been smaller.
Furthermore
, the cancer
centre
was expanded to the
area
located in the nursing school.
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