Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

It is argued that to lower the crime rate it is essential to make prison duration longer.
However
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some
people
think that there are possible other solutions. In my opinion, giving more time in
prisons
might be helpful but not for everyone, so it's better to punish differently. Prison is a correctional centre with punishment, so
people
should attend special lessons and do hard work.
Thus
, In a given period of
time
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people
are supposed to change their minds and stop criminal actions.
Although
, there is something different that affects
people
.
For instance
, in
general
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prisons
where felons can communicate with each
other
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there are other rules. There are the main person is the one who can fight and they can do whatever they want even being under arrest. The whole system in most
prisons
builds by them. The other ones are the victims of
this
system. That complicated and unfair hierarchy will push them to stop their felonious issues. More time being there can change them more and more.
On the other hand
, we can notice the types of
people
who are plunged into an illegal world more after prison. Since
people
can be totally influenced by the social environment, it's possible scenery that they will become worse.
In addition
to that, prisoner's food and duration are paid by civilian taxes with which
people
are not satisfied. Most of them suggest coming back for earlier methods of torture,
such
as an electrical chair, boiled water and beating with hunger.
This
is cruel but effective since
people
will do anything in front of fear. Taking everything into account,
prisons
can take
people
to right way but not always, physical abuse is another better and more efficient way than most
people
think. I
also
agree with the second statement that felons have to be threatened with cruelty.
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