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The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#aim #science #people’s #lives
There’s a widespread belief that the main reason
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careful consideration, I tend to totally agree with
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science
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the people,
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science
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human’s
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 history, the frontier who
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 the theory of
science
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useful
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 and helpful for their
lives
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 rule,
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science
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hole
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 society and
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 of
this
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concentrate
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improve
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 people’s
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social welfare and cultivate
further
 development
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other discipline
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 (前面已经有了improve后面用can能接更多谓语么)
such
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 Once the life quality improves, the happiness and convince will bring to the citizens, therefor they will become more energetic and dynamic.
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 of marginal effects,
such
 as increasing in working efficiency,
yield
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 of crops, reproduction rate and so on. Making an example, all kinds of platforms that build on
internet
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 link people all together, bringing more friendships and
inspirations
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 than before. The pioneer in a subject who studying in China and UK have more
change
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 to switch their ideas
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 different contexts. That will contribute to the
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publishing of interdisciplinary themes and ideology.
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Generally, the most important part of
science
 is improving
people
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 daily
lives
. I highly recommend the government should make
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that
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related to
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • enhancing
  • quality of human life
  • advancements
  • medicine
  • healthcare
  • scientific research
  • solving societal problems
  • improving living standards
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • food scarcity
  • technological advancements
  • limitations
  • negative consequences
  • ethical considerations
  • sustainability
  • environmental preservation
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