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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured
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The given flow chart illustrates
a
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the
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 process of producing the pre-prepared
noodles
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.
Overall
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, it is evident from the flow chart that the process is linear and consists of eight main stages; starting with mixing the basic
ingredient s
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ingredients
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 of
noodles
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 which are flour, water, and oil in one place.
Moreover
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, flavours are added to the cups with
noodles
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 in
final
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the final
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 stage.
According to
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 the diagram ,
firstly
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, after flour is supplied to the shortage silos,
then
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 it is
refered
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referred
 to
the
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as the
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 biggest mixing bowl with water and oil.
Afterthat
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, the dough which was
mixured
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mixed
go
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goes
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 through rollers and
secondly
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 it is carried on dough sheets. At the next stage, it would be the little strips.
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,
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then
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the
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 stripped
noodles
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 are shaped
in to
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into
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 discs in the fifth step. Later which is doing cook and dry. After
completed
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completing
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 the primary manufacturing procedure, it reached to adding flavours,
such
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 as vegetables and spices to cups which include the pre-making
noodles
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. Eventually, it became the
expecting
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 production with labelling and sealing.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words noodles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • mixing ingredients
  • dough preparation
  • sheeting
  • steaming
  • cutting techniques
  • dehydration
  • deep-frying
  • cooling system
  • packaging
  • quality control
  • production line
  • mass production
  • food preservation
  • convenience food
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