The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
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The two charts compare the
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consumption and
greenhouse
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gas
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emission of Australian households in various categories over an unspecified period of time.
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, heating and water heating were the main sources of
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consumption,
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water heating and other appliances contributed the most to
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gas
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emission
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. Heating, despite being the largest
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consumer, ranked third in terms of
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gas
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emission
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emissions
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. Heating consumed 42% of the total
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, the highest among all categories, but emitted only 15% of the total
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gas
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, less than half of its
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share.
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, water heating used 30% of the total
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, the second highest, and
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emitted 32% of the total
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gas
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, the highest among all categories. Refrigeration emitted 14% of the total
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gas
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, twice as much as its
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consumption of 7%. Other appliances consumed 15% of the total
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, but emitted 28% of the total
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gas
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, almost double their
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share. Lighting and cooling both consumed 4% and 2% of the total
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respectively, but lighting emitted 8% of the total
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gas
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, twice as much as cooling's 4%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, greenhouse, gas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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