The charts below show the different forms in which fish were sold in 1950 and 1985

The charts below show the different forms in which fish were sold in 1950 and 1985
The two pie charts provide information about
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fish
market in 1950 and 1985. In general, the number of
sales
increased significantly in
35-years
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35 years
time.
Initially
, fresh
fish
was the largest commodity. As time went by,
fish
as animal
meal
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took over the largest market. In the first chart, the total
sales
in 1950
was
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21,000,000 tonnes and
was
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dominated by fresh
fish
with 50%. Cured
fish
took up 33% of the
sales
that year. The other 17% consisted of animal
meal
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, canned
fish
, and frozen
fish
which were 10%, 6%, and 1% respectively. In the second chart, the total
sales
in 1985
was
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76,000,000 tonnes, which was three times larger than 1950’s figure. In
this
period, the
sales
in animal meal form were the largest with 32%. Canned
fish
, which contributed
small
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percentage in
previous
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period was in
the
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second place with 22%.
On the other hand
, the number of fresh
fish
and cured
fish
sold decreased significantly to 20% for the former and to 13% for the latter.
Finally
, frozen
fish
sales
increased noticeably by 12% to 13%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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