The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
The
two
charts illustrate how road access to a city
hospital changed over three years.
Overall
, it is clear that
there was a considerable change including, two
roundabout
, Change to a plural noun
roundabouts
two
parking for staff and other public and ,and a new bus
station was constructed. Furthermore
, the stop bus
was removed.
Looking at the two
maps in more detail, in the northeast of city
hospital Correct article usage
the city
the
large park for Correct article usage
a
public
was Add an article
the public
builded
. In the north of Correct your spelling
built
city
hospital the Ring Correct article usage
the city
road
Capitalize word
Road
unchanged
. In the Add a missing verb
is unchanged
center
of Change the spelling
centre
Correct article usage
the maps
maps
the Add a comma
,maps
six stop
Add a hyphen
six-stop
bus
was replaced with two
roundabout
and Change to a plural noun
roundabouts
also
these roundabout
Fix the agreement mistake
roundabouts
contect
the Correct your spelling
connect
city
hospital with city
road.
Regarding the other changes, in between Correct article usage
the city
two
roundabout
in the east the Change to a plural noun
roundabouts
the
car park Remove the redundancy
apply
was become
only for employees. In the west of the Change to the active voice
became
has become
two
maps between the two
roundabout
Change to a plural noun
roundabouts
was
a new Unnecessary verb
apply
bus
station was established and also
the bus
station open
in Wrong verb form
opened
two
direction
to the roundabouts.Change to a plural noun
directions
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, city, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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