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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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The
two
 charts illustrate how road access to a
city
 hospital changed over three years.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 there was a considerable change including,
two
roundabout
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roundabouts
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,
two
 parking for staff and other public and ,and a new
bus
 station was constructed.
Furthermore
, the stop
bus
 was removed. Looking at the
two
 maps in more detail, in the northeast of
city
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the city
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 hospital
the
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a
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 large park for
public
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the public
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 was
builded
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built
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. In the north of
city
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the city
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 hospital the Ring
road
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Road
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unchanged
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is unchanged
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. In the
center
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centre
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 of
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the maps
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maps
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,maps
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 the
six stop
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six-stop
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bus
 was replaced with
two
roundabout
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roundabouts
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 and
also
 these
roundabout
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roundabouts
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contect
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connect
 the
city
 hospital with
city
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the city
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 road. Regarding the other changes, in between
two
roundabout
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roundabouts
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 in the east the
the
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apply
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car park
was become
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became
has become
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 only for employees. In the west of the
two
 maps between the
two
roundabout
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roundabouts
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was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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a new
bus
 station was established and
also
 the
bus
 station
open
Wrong verb form
opened
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 in
two
direction
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directions
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 to the roundabouts.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, city, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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