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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
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The diagram presents the average change in prices of three different metals in 2014 monthly.
Overall
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, the
price
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 of nickel is the most changed
price
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 at the beginning of 2014. The prices of all metals shift slightly
at the end
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 of that year. In 2014, the
price
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 of nickel started at 6 per
cent
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 in January.
Then
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, its
price
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 dropped significantly from 6 per
cent
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 in January to -3 per
cent
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 in
June
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. After the drop, it fluctuated between July and Oct. After that, it bounced back to 1 per
cent
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 in Nov and remained the same in
Dec
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. The
price
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 of copper was at 2 per
cent
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 in Jan. It dropped continuously from 2 per
cent
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 in Jan to 0.5 per
cent
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 in
June
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.
Then
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, it rose to 1 per
cent
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 in
June
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 and stayed the same in Sep, and it ended at 1.5 per
cent
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 in
Dec
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.
Lastly
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, the
price
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 of Zinc began at 2 per
cent
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 in Jan. It jumped to 3 per
cent
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 in Feb.
Then
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, it dropped continuously to -1 per
cent
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 in
June
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 and remained at 0.5 per
cent
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 in July for 3 months.
Then
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, it increased dramatically to 2 per
cent
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 in
Dec
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. In conclusion, the
price
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 of all 3 metals started at different rates of change.
However
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, their prices are stable in
Dec
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 2014.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, cent, june, dec with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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