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some people think that advertisement are good for the society whereas other oppose the view discuss both view and give your opinion

#people #advertisement #society
Advertising is the
way
 to reach common
people
.Some
people
 concur that advertising is the
way
 forward and the best
way
 to reach
common
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the common
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 man in terms of
business
, knowledge, awareness etc.
While
 others feel that the general public does not understand its importance as it's become
everyday
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an everyday
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 routine. I quibble from them and
propund
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propound
proud
profound
 that advertising is a
briliant
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brilliant
way
 to reach common
people
.
This
 essay will discuss both views with examples in the upcoming paragraphs and come to a conclusion. There are many reasons why I assert that advertising is essential. Predominantly, we all know that there are so many options available in the market,
advertising
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and advertising
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 helps them to reach the general population.
Also
, advertising provides visibility and targets a certain area.
For
example-We
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example we
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 are aware of the jeans brand like
levis
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Levis
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 because of advertising. It's not only made a name for itself but
also
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is also
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 considered
as
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apply
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the best one in the
business
.
Besides
, it makes it easier for the common man to take decisions based on what they are offered.
Hence
, advertising is needed not only for selling but
also
make
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to make
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 it easier for the public to buy products.
On the other hand
, you can't deny the fact that seeing similar advertisements not only
make
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makes
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 it confusing but
also
 makes it monotonous. Companies/
Business
 owners should make use of creative advertisements for selling and staying in
people
's minds for a longer duration.
This
 will not only help the awareness, and reach more
peonle
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people
 but
also
 brina
areat
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great
 economic growth. In my opinion,
while
 advertisements are not able to stay in
peoples
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people's
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 minds in day-to-day life but their importance cannot be denied. It's like a double-edged sword, if used in a creative manner, it will be a boon to the
business
 and if not, will not yield any results.
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