The diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea.

The diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea.
The given diagram highlights the process by which black tea is manufactured. There are two diverse methods for doing it; the traditional one and
also
the modern style.
The first
step
is that Fresh tea leaves are picked by a Worker who knows that she should pick two types only and
then
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second
step
is started in the name of withering at which point a fan is involved to dry leaves and
also
a rack; a stage helps that around 60% moisture are cut. At
this
point,
two
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traditional and modern stages become separated.
In other words
,
Cutting
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the Cutting
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method is utilized in modern one by way of Cutting,
torning
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turning
and curling leaves; a way to create smaller pieces quickly
while
in the other style, Rolling is used which makes leaves be rolled flat and broked with the aim of releasing enzymes from them. Followingly,
Oxidation
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the Oxidation
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or Fermentation
step
is involved which is
samed
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same
in both methods to
speard
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spread
them either tiles or cement which gives a helping hand to combine air and enzymes to alter their
colors
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to copper. The
last
step
is
Firing
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/Drying process in
oven
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the oven
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owing to
releasing
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release
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flavour and aroma
along with
outing 97% moisture
totally
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words step with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditional method
  • CTC method
  • Manufacturing process
  • Withering
  • Rolling
  • Fermentation
  • Drying
  • Sorting
  • Crushing
  • Tearing
  • Curling
  • Quality
  • Flavor
  • Aroma
  • Technology advancements
  • Environmental considerations
  • Consumer preference
  • Pricing
  • Tea grade categorization
  • Market implications
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