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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad sitiation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad sitiation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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The action in the worst
situation
 is the topic of discussion.
Although
 some think accepting the bad
situation
 is the best way, others, myself included, believe that we have to try hard and make the
situation
 better. The first reason would be about the experience because bad situations can learn the community a big lesson.
For example
, a girl who likes to spend
money
 on clothes without any concern about
money
, her father was bankrupted and there was not any
money
 and she learns to work hard and store
money
 for the future. So, a hard position can learn us a lesson which is experience.
Moreover
, the second one is about our future
due to
 the bad
situation
 that can learn
people
 how to value everything.
For instance
, a boy who is a singer right now but in the past, he was just a flower bou, now can appreciate those bad days.
Hence
, the worst position learn
people
 to value the moments. Some may argue that they should accept a bad
situation
 because they think that they cannot change it and
also
 there is not any hope for that
situation
.
However
, 90% of
people
 believe that through hard work, everything can be changed.
Furthermore
, when a door closes, a window opens. In conclusion, in my point of view, what should
people
 do in a bad
situation
 is to try hard and improve that
situation
 for two reasons, one is about the experience and the other is about our future, to value everything in a moment.
However
, some crowd believe that accepting the
situation
 is the best way for some reasons which are not reasonable to me.
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