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Many people no longer read newspapers or watch TV news programmes. Instead they get news about the world from the Internet. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, a large number of people are using the
internet
 to get the world's
news
,
This
 might have disadvantages
besides
 it is advantages .
firstly
 , on the one hand , many individuals tend to use the
internet
while
 trying to know what is happening today around the world , if it is by phone , computer or even
ipad
Correct your spelling
iPad
.
However
 ,
this
 can be helpful if nations needed to read the
news
 at any time and approximately they may find reports easier than waiting for a specific time for a special programme.
On the other hand
 , depending on the
internet
 may be harmful to companies which manufactured televisions and
similarly
 to newspaper makers . And
this
 can be in several ways , apply as if people stopped watching the
news
 on Tv ,factories will mostly close or try to develop from it is devices.
Moreover
 , some jobs may disappear if people depended completely on the
Internet
 ,
for example
 : the newsreader will have to find another work , and even more, the mailman will face the same situation. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both point of view , I believe that in term of using the
internet
 to get
news
 ,there are plenty of considerable positive points which makes it more effective these days than reading newspapers or watching the
news
 on Tv.
Submitted by jumana.fareed.2005 on

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