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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, liesure and work activities. What extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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Information
technology
 has become a crucial part of our lives and transforming many aspects of them. It has a great number of benefits.
Therefore
, in
this
 essay, I will explain why the advantages of
information
technology
 outweigh the disadvantages. One of the most significant advantages is communication. We are now able to stay in touch with our loved ones who live abroad.
Moreover
, with the help of
information
technology
, we have instant access to the internet. Everyone can find
information
 about any topic online and students can use it for their education.
In addition
, it has made it possible for people to be aware of things that are taking place in the world. Another benefit may be booking. Today, everyone can book a seat for flights, order their food from restaurants, and call a taxi with the help of online services.
Moreover
, today, everyone has a hectic and busy lifestyle and
for
this
 reason, they may not be able to book something offline because of their work. Booking online comes in handy for them. The most substantial disadvantage is cyber-security. Since
information
technology
 started to enhance, the attacks of hackers have become frequent. They started to steal personal data, privacy and others. It can lead to loss of privacy, reputation and finance. People can become too addicted as it is very amusing.
In addition
, people who spend too much time on
this
 may have some health problems
such
 as low physical strength and poor eyesight. By way of conclusion,
although
 it may have some physical and private dangers, it has more beneficial sides for communication, work and education. These things are the most significant things for human beings.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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