The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates how the carbonated beverages are produced in the factory.
Overall
, there are 5 main stages during the process, beginning with the preparations for cleaning water and finishing with packaging and transporting the resulting mixture.
In the first stage of production, raw water is transferred through a filter to a softener which contains some chemicals used to make the water softer. Then
in the second step, it is pumped into an electric heater for heating evaporation. After the liquid is conveyed through a cooling pipe, carbon dioxide is added to carry out a carbonation process .
Thirdly
, the carbonated liquid is stored in a mixing tank where various colouring, sweeteners, as well as
flavourings, are included. After that, different types of carbonated drinks are filtered before being filled in containers such
as bottles and cans so that they are kept in good condition. Finally
, all the finished products are packaged into boxes and delivered to supermarkets for retailing.Submitted by danphamngocha on
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