The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.
The map suggests 2 different layouts for opening a new school in Canterbury named s1 & s2.
Overall
, It is clear that
the suggestions given are in the countryside and town
centre
area.
Looking at the countryside, s1 is located in the northeast and it has housing within walkable distance. From the town
centre
place , Sturry is just 5 km away and it has the highest population of 7000 . The main roads for Sturry are connected from the town
centre
to the countryside end and the university is easily accessible by students from S1 since it's located on top of the North.
Moving on to the town
centre
suggestions, s2 is located in the middle of the town
centre
and it is a no traffic zone place, which will help pupils to come without stress.The distance between the town
centre
and Chatham is 7km away and the people count in that area is 4500. Whereas
the residential area is a bit far and the university is quite far away.Submitted by sowmya madhavan on
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