The table below shows the percentages of moblie phone owners using various mobile phone features from 2006 to 2010.

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The table provides information on how much mobile owners used different features of mobile phones in percentages between the year 2006 to 2010.

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, making calls was the primary characteristic over the four-year period

whereas

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compared to other advantages. At the beginning of 2006, phone holders utilized the chat method features the most after calls and followed by clicking pictures through their devices.

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, by the end of the year 2010 a surge in usage can be seen.

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, playing mobile games was not popular at the start of the time but in the

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two years, it has seen rapid growth,

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there are features which didn't gather much enthusiasm from the users, it as playing songs and recording videos their phones which were the least percentages in all these years.

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, surfing the internet has seen a massive involvement in the year 2010 with 73% of users

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to the previous years probably

due to

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the development of social media as well.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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3 paragraphs

165 words

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The table below shows the percentages of moblie phone owners using various mobile phone features from 2006 to 2010.

Public celebrations (national days, festivals) are held in many countries. Some people say that these celebrations are a waste of money and we should spend money on more important things. Do you agree or disagree?

You recently took a long vacation. In your absence, a friend did you a huge favor.

These days, a majority of animals are kept in zoos in order to save them from becoming extinct. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?