the chart below show the distribytion of the world water and the use of water in three countries

the chart below show the distribytion of the world water and the use of water in three countries
The pie charts describe the distribution of
water
in the world,
while
the bar chart gives information regarding the
use
of
water
in Egypt, Saudi Arabia, and Canada.
Overall
, the world's
water
is mostly salt
water
and not fresh.
This
freshwaterwater
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freshwater water
is mostly found in ice and glaciers. Egypt and Saudi Arabia
use
mostly
water
for agricultural
use
while
Canada for industrial
use
.
Salt
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Saltwater
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water
constitutes 97% of
water
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the water
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on our planet but only 3% is fresh
water
. Fresh
water
is mostly found in ice and glaciers 79%.
Then
ground
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groundwater
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water
and surface
water
constitute the remaining sources by 20% and 1%
respictively
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respectively
. Egypt and Saudi Arabia show similar patterns of
use
of
water
with just under 80% for agriculture,
and
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just above 10% for domestic
use
, and 10% or less for industry purposes.
However
, Canada shows an opposite trend with almost 80% of the
water
used for industry,
then
around 10% for both farming and local
use
.
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