In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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countryside areas to continue their lives in

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population in rural places is decreasing in many countries. I believe that it is a negative development

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the problems it can cause,

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as overpopulation in

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and nutrition problems in society.

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, the development of countryside areas is important for the improvement of food production because the vast majority of rural

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work on farms. If many

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start to move from these areas, the amount of food production will decrease and it will cause food scarcity in the country which

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will not only affect the number of foods that have been produced but

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fall in the quality of foods. Lack of quality will have a negative effect on the improvement of children.

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, there will be a fall in the

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of vitamins that mother's milk contains, in

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newborn babies will be less developed

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situation is a drawback for countries is because the

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will be more overcrowded places and that will damage the world's ecosystem.

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, in our modern world overpopulation is the main reason for air pollution,

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, the usage of more cars in the

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is polluting the weather.

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could be seen as a tiny problem by society but these types of problems can create a snowball effect.

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, air pollution is one of the main causes of the global problem

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climate change. In conclusion, the massive move of rural

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from the countryside to

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is a huge drawback and in my opinion, it should be considered as a negative development.