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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides information about the
amount
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number
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 of tourists who visited a Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, there is a significant rise in the number of total visits made by the guests to
this
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island
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 over the 7-year period. The most dramatic increase was seen in the figures for
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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. In 2010,
totally
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total
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, more than 1
million
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people
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 visited
this
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island
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.
While
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 more than 0.5
million
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people
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 preferred to spend their time inside
of
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apply
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the
island
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,
visitors
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 who stayed on
cruise
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ships
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 were only around 0.3
million
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 in that year. During 7 years, demand for
this
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island
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was
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increased significantly and
total
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the total
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 number of visits reached 3.5
million
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 in 2017. Guests
of
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in
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 the Caribbean who wanted to stay on
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island
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the island
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 increased slightly but compared to
the
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apply
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2010, the amount of these
people
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was
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were
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 less than
visitors
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 who stayed on
cruise
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ships
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, with the amount of 1.5
million
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. By 2017, the figures for
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 had risen to 2
million
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people
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, visitors, cruise, ships, million, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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