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More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people suggest that the solution to this problem is to increase the price of fattening foods. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words

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In today's Era, The variety of
foods
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 which are available to humankind is astonishing, From Instant processed food to packaged meals everything is easily obtained. People tend to compromise their health just to save the hassle of cooking. I totally comply with increasing the price of fattening
foods
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 and I will provide legitimate reasons for it as well. In past decades, individuals were not obese compared to the present time, it could be
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 the fact that earlier processed snacks which are high in fats used to be over-priced and not everyone could afford them. For ,instance my grandfather once said to me, that after working on farms he always ate the food made at home
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 there were shops which used to sell quick snacks which contained unhealthy fats,
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 he never chose to buy those things because they were costly
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 of the day,
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 fattening
foods
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 are cheap which is the main reason the public opts for these things. In spite of all these reasons, companies should display the bad elements it contains alongside cost.
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 will not only catch the eye of the consumer but
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 help them to understand what they are eating will lead them to health issues.
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, a substantial surge in fees will make customers question their purchasing reasons as well. As
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 in the UK, many shoppers present their delicacies with the consumption of nutrition facts alongside prices, not only
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 motive helps the citizens to push towards a healthy lifestyle but
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 makes them expand their nutritional knowledge as well. To succinctly summarize , Indeed fattening
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 are generating more obesity
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 it's
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 the range of products available at
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 cheap bill which generally people seek to look for usually to save some pennies from their budgets.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • fattening foods
  • calorie-dense
  • healthier food choices
  • taxation
  • economic implications
  • social implications
  • subsidies
  • nutritional education
  • public health campaigns
  • nanny state
  • individual's right
  • consumer behavior
  • preventative measures
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