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Some universities offer online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, many online learning platforms are used by universities all over the world
instead
 of traditional face-to-face
classes
. In my opinion, despite the particular downsides of
this
 new method, I am still more inclined towards the benefits that it brings.
Firstly
, one of the most significant features of online
classes
 is that
students
 from anywhere can gain access to
courses
 offered by top universities.
For example
,
last
 summer I took an online course offered by Oxford University and I did not have to undergo the enormous expenses of going and living abroad.
Secondly
, these
classes
 are recorded and
students
 can replay them as many times as they wish to understand the whole point with no time limitation. These recorded files can
also
 help
students
 take notes from subjects discussed in
class
 more easily.
In addition
,
while
 attending a
class
,
students
 may come up with a question or even not know the meaning of a term or sentence, so they can search for that through the internet without distracting others or disrupting the
class
.
Furthermore
, by taking online
courses
,
students
 are able to attend
class
 wherever they want.
For instance
, they can participate in a
class
 in a quiet place like a library to stay focused and have access to many books.
Moreover
, internet-based
courses
 can help
students
 not to miss their
classes
 during crises.
For example
,
while
 COVID-19 was spreading all around the world, online
courses
 took the place of face-to-face ones.
Therefore
,
students
 could participate in their
classes
 at their own home. In conclusion, online learning in tertiary education is a positive trend that could help
students
 to improve their learning results.
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Task Achievement
Your essay demonstrates a clear understanding of the task and provides a comprehensive response. The ideas are relevant and well-developed.
Coherence and Cohesion
The logical structure of your essay is effective, and your ideas are well-connected. Ensure that the introduction and conclusion further connect to the main body of the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • accessibility
  • tuition fees
  • commuting
  • accommodation
  • multimedia
  • interactive tools
  • enhance
  • cater to
  • face-to-face interaction
  • personalized attention
  • complex concepts
  • motivation
  • discipline
  • structure
  • extracurricular activities
  • networking
  • university experience
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