Some people fail in school , but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case ? What is the most important thing to succeed in life? (TYPE 5 – TWO PART QUESTİONS )

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on our lifeway,
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we see some cases that unlucky
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find
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after
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into
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. I think being successful depends mostly on
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chance which has
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by God since birth.
School
is the second place that
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children to be
matured
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person. In other
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, children, in their first years, get primary information
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live from their parents,
subsequently
, they
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this ideas
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at
school
by learning various subjects.
Moreover
, if students show enthusiasm for getting
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education, they will have much chance to develop and
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degrees like
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a bachelor
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,
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or master
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in
the
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different areas
due to
their interests. To illustrate, a study which had taken by a group of Azerbaijani professors shows that
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of successful students
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directed by intense guidance.
On the other hand
, there is humankind who by no means steps on
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way despite her
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diligence
.
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in one family one of
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could be good at math,
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would
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a bachelor
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bachelor
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degree,
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would
be participate
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events
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as
volunteer
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, yet despite all these facts, she still works for
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which not less than her sisters' who had never been successful at
school
. In conclusion, in my opinion, not all
millionaries
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millionaires
were responsible at
school
. To be gifted is the most essential key for stepping on lucky stairs.
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