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Some people say that studying at school is not important because most important things are learnt outside the school. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some folks argue that it is not essential to attend school because they think that most of the
life
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-related valuable lessons are learned outside in the real world. I disagree with
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 statement, as
schools
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 are the main building block of any education and teach other social
skills
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 to children.
To begin
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 with,
Schools
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 provide basic academic education to students, which they use in their later
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.
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, language writing and basic math calculation are needed at any part of
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 to survive in
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 competitive era.
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, a set of useful resources is given to those who attend the specific courses and these study materials provide deep knowledge of that particular subject that can be hard to learn from outside.
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, In educational institutes students not only learn academic subjects but
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 learn moral values.
Schools
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 are the first step where kids make friends and start their social contact.
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, these academies enhance pupils' other soft
skills
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 like communication and confidence.
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, if a student is good at subjects but lacks in speaking , teachers can help him or her by providing group discussion sessions. These soft
skills
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 are required at every stage of
life
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 to be successful at a job. In later
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life
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life,
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 it is hard to learn
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skills
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 as most people
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 busy with their daily responsibilities.
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, attending school is the most significant part of
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, because it not only gives primary education but
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 prepares an individual for a competitive job market. People learn another important ethical lesson from
schools
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.

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Expand more on the argument in the introduction and provide a clear thesis statement. Make sure to fully answer the question and address all aspects of the prompt.
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